An extra reminder...

This is a reminder to the five or so of you who have not turned in your papers to turnitin.com.  I am grading papers today, so if your paper is not submitted to the website, I will not grade it, and you will receive a zero on it.  That's a lot of work you did that would go right down the drain.
Once I submit the grades to the department...there's no turning back, so they need to be submitted now. You've all put hard work into this class; I do not want to see it go to waste.

In-class notes about sources and templates

Incorporating Sources/other’s ideas into your own writing/ideas

Summarize/explain the claims/thoughts of others

                She demonstrates that….

1.        Michael Pollen, the author of “Corn Conquest,” demonstrates that basically everything is made of corn.   

2.       Pollen also states that because we consume so much corn, we are essentially becoming corn ourselves. 

3.       A narrator in Food, Inc. states, “The industry doesn’t want you to know… or else you wouldn’t want to eat”

4.       According to a narrator in Food, Inc., “…”

Agreements:

Michael Pollen, the author of “Corn Conquest,” demonstrates that basically everything is made of corn.   Pollen also states that because we consume so much corn, we are essentially becoming corn ourselves.  I agree that so many things being made of corn is an issue because my friend’s experience being sick from eating too much corn confirms that.

Michael Pollen, the author of “Corn Conquest,” demonstrates that basically everything is made of corn.   Pollen also states that because we consume so much corn, we are essentially becoming corn ourselves. I agree that “we are made of corn,” a point that needs emphasizing since so many people believe that it doesn’t matter what we eat.

Disagreements:

Michael Pollen, the author of “Corn Conquest,” demonstrates that basically everything is made of corn.   Pollen also states that because we consume so much corn, we are essentially becoming corn ourselves.  I think Pollen is mistaken because he overlooks popular brands like Laura Scudders that do not use corn. 

               

Pollen’s claim that “we are made of corn” rests upon the questionable assumption that we eat too much corn. 

Okay, but:

A narrator in Food, Inc. states, “The industry doesn’t want you to know… or else you wouldn’t want to eat.” What they don’t want us to know is the process in which the food is made.   Whereas Food, Inc. provides ample evidence that shows the process that had been hidden, I am convinced that this is not a major problem because I eat McDonalds everyday and am very healthy. 

Though Food, Inc. is right that the FDA should have the power to shut down food corporations that do not meet standards, the movie seems on more dubious (questionable, uncertain, a bit dishonest) ground when one of its narrators claims that any increase in sales of organic foods is a good thing. 

Parenthetical citation/labeling

A narrator in Food, Inc. states, “The industry doesn’t want you to know… or else you wouldn’t want to eat” (Food, Inc).

He says “we are made of corn” (Pollen 290). 

Extra Credit

Some say strong writing can convey an author's voice (the pattern in which they speak, their intonation, their personality).  Compare the written version of David Foster Wallace's "This is Water" speech to the audio of the speech (which can be found in the posts below).  How does he convey his "voice" through his writing, or does he? Use specific examples from the written version and the audio to make your case.

Should be at least 1 single-spaced, typed page.
Worth up to 5 points (out of a total 100 in the class)
Due Thursday, July 26th

Portfolio Layout

Assignment: In-class essays Portfolio 2 (in a three-ring binder)

Due date: Monday, June 23^th

Contents & Order:

1. Section 1: In-class essay #4
                  a. Prompt/Checklist/Rubric sheet for in-class essay #4

b. Rough Draft of in-class essay #4

c. Revision Activity Sheet for in-class essay #4

d. Revised Draft of in-class essay #4

2. Section 2: In-class essay #5
                  a. Prompt/Checklist/Rubric sheet for in-class essay #5

b. Rough Draft of in-class essay #5

c. Revision Activity Sheet for in-class essay #5

d. Revised Draft of in-class essay #5



      3. Section 3: In-class essay #6
                  a. Prompt/Checklist/Rubric sheet for in-class essay #6

b. Rough Draft of in-class essay #6

c. Revision Activity Sheet for in-class essay #6

d. Revised Draft of in-class essay #6

*All drafts, both rough and revised, should be hand-written and primarily reflect the work you’ve completed in-class. 

Conference Schedule for Final Week

Tuesday, June 24th
11:40-12
Jasmine, Destiny, & Maricruz

12-12:20
Akinori, Maria, & Diego

12:20-12:40
Ana-alica, Eddie, & Miguel

12:40-1
Cindy, Alyssa, & Tess

1-1:20
Juan L., Daniel L., & Trinidad


Wednesday, July 25th

11:40-12
Mike

, Adrian, Joanna

12-12:20
Raul, Francisco, & Joseph

12:20-12:40
Daniel R., Xuxan, & Nellie

12:40-1
Crissy, Brian, & Juan V.

1-1:20
Esmeralda, Austin, & Brooke

TRIAC

Topic Sentences- Separates out the part of the thesis that the paragraph will deal with. 

            Example- Thesis: I am going to college to study English, become a writer, and impress my father.

            First topic sentence: I am going to college first to study English.

            Second topic sentence: I am going to college also to become a writer.

            Third topic sentence: Finally, I am going to college to impress my father. 

            Example- Thesis statement: As you go out into the day-to-day world, it is important to try to control your negative thoughts. 

            First topic sentence: The day to day world is the repetitive “creepy,” upsetting routine. 

            Second topic sentence: Controlling your negative thoughts means that you have to choose how you react. 

Restatement- Further focuses the claim made in the topic sentence. 

            Example: Topic sentence: I am going to college also to become a writer.

            Restatement: I will become a writer while in college. 

            Example: topic sentence: The day to day world is the repetitive “creepy,” upsetting routine. 

            Restatement: The routine of a lackluster position is mind numbing.  [alternative: working and taking care of children at home is extremely exhausting].

Illustration- examples, explanation, details, facts, description

           

Examples: topic sentence: The day to day world is the repetitive “creepy,” upsetting routine. 

            Restatement: The routine of a lackluster position is mind numbing.  [alternative: working and taking care of children at home is extremely exhausting].

            Illustration: My eyelids are as heavy as rocks.  [A description of the steps of the day] [several sentences like this would follow].

“Write drunk; edit sober”- Hemingway

       

Something extra...

Here is a link to the audio of David Foster Wallace's commencement speech, "This is Water." It has many parts not included in the written version we read for class.  It's really wonderful and inspiring to listen to. Check it out.  And don't forget to listen to Part 2 for which a link will pop up at the end of Part 1.

http://video.search.yahoo.com/video/play?p=david%20foster%20wallace%20this%20is%20water&tnr=21&vid=4627553034043542&l=734&turl=http%3A%2F%2Fts3.mm.bing.net%2Fvideos%2Fthumbnail.aspx%3Fq%3D4627553034043542%26id%3D815d91eb65a609e2feb720317241ccca%26bid%3D%252bFmyjVXQuZV%252bqw%26bn%3DThumb%26url%3Dhttp%253a%252f%252fwww.youtube.com%252fwatch%253fv%253dvET9cvlGJQw&rurl=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.youtube.com%2Fwatch%3Fv%3DvET9cvlGJQw&sigr=11ariu2lc&newfp=1&tit=This+Is+Water+-+David+Foster+Wallace+-+Part+1

Class Cancelled Today (July 2nd)

Good morning class,
I cancelled class today as I've had a headache all morning.  We will return tomorrow and catch up, spending a portion of the day on reading and discussing "I Want a Wife" and the other portion on writing this week's essay rough draft.  Your out-of-class essays will now be due tomorrow.
Also, I will have some of your portfolios back tomorrow and the others on Thursday (too many to carry in one trip!)
See you tomorrow,
C